Christmas Cake
Dec 24, 2015 14:00
Today, I got Christmas cakes from my acquaintance.
There were various cakes, such as a shortcake, strawberries, a caramel, a chocolate, green tea, oranges and a Mont Blanc.
After lunch, my laboratory members and I ate them.
It was delicious.
Unfortunately, there is no other event in this year's Christmas Eve and Christmas.
There were various cakes, such as a shortcake, strawberries, a caramel, a chocolate, green tea, oranges and a Mont Blanc.
After lunch, my laboratory members and I ate them.
It was delicious.
Unfortunately, there is no other event in this year's Christmas Eve and Christmas.
クリスマスケーキ
今日は知人からクリスマスケーキをもらいました。
イチゴやキャラメル、チョコ、抹茶、みかん、モンブランなど、様々な種類のケーキが入っていました。
お昼ごはんの後、研究室の皆で食べました。
美味しかったです。
しかし悲しいことに、今年のクリスマスイブとクリスマスには、他に何も予定がありません。
今日は知人からクリスマスケーキをもらいました。
イチゴやキャラメル、チョコ、抹茶、みかん、モンブランなど、様々な種類のケーキが入っていました。
お昼ごはんの後、研究室の皆で食べました。
美味しかったです。
しかし悲しいことに、今年のクリスマスイブとクリスマスには、他に何も予定がありません。
No. 1 Skippy_Snappy's correction
- Today, I got Christmas cakes from my acquaintance.
- Today, I got Christmas cakes from my acquaintances.
- There were various cakes, such as a shortcake, strawberries, a caramel, a chocolate, green tea, oranges and a Mont Blanc.
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There were various cakes, such as a shortcake, strawberry, a caramel, a chocolate, green tea, oranges and a Mont Blanc.
If you want to keep "a shortcake, a..." you have to change the beginning of the sentence. Something like, "There was a....". Then you could list them all. The correction sounds more natural and complex, however.
- After lunch, my laboratory members and I ate them.
- This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!
- It was delicious.
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They were delicious.
I'm assuming you ate more than one of them :)
- Unfortunately, there is no other event in this year's Christmas Eve and Christmas.
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Unfortunately, there are no other events for Christmas Eve or Christmas.
You can also say, "Unfortunately, there will be no more events for the Christmas holiday this year."
Those cakes sound delicious!
kanotown
Thank you so much for the corrections and helpful comments! :D
Actually, I ate just one of them, but other people also said "it's delicious," so I should have written "they were delicious!"
Thank you so much for the corrections and helpful comments! :D
Actually, I ate just one of them, but other people also said "it's delicious," so I should have written "they were delicious!"
No. 2 Zach34's correction
- Today, I got Christmas cakes from my acquaintance.
- This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!
- There were various cakes, such as a shortcake, strawberries, a caramel, a chocolate, green tea, oranges and a Mont Blanc.
- There were various cakes, such as a shortcake, strawberry, caramel, chocolate, green tea, orange, and a Mont Blanc.
- After lunch, my laboratory members and I ate them.
- This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!
- It was delicious.
- This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!
- Unfortunately, there is no other event in this year's Christmas Eve and Christmas.
- Unfortunately, there are no other events during Christmas Eve or Christmas.
kanotown
Thank you very much for correcting my post! :D
Thank you very much for correcting my post! :D
No. 3 Sharu's correction
- Today, I got Christmas cakes from my acquaintance.
- Today, I received Christmas cakes from my acquaintance.
- After lunch, my laboratory members and I ate them.
- After lunch, I ate them with my lab partners.
kanotown
Thank you very much for correcting my post! :)
Thank you very much for correcting my post! :)
No. 4 outdoors's correction
- Unfortunately, there is no other event in this year's Christmas Eve and Christmas.
- Unfortunately, there is are no other events for Christmas Eve or Christmas I'm attending in this year's .
kanotown
Thank you so much for the correction! :)
Thank you so much for the correction! :)